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  Sparks flew as one of the logs crashed down in the fire. You watched as the bright red sparks soared into the night sky looking like bright stars. You were out camping with your friends John, Dave and Rose, and right about now you were roasting marshmallows. “Mmmm…” You hummed as you popped a marshmallow into your mouth. “Hey guys I know what we should do!” John exclaimed. “Besides eat the wicked marshmallows that are somehow ironically screaming at us not to eat them but we do anyways.” Dave said roasting the sugary sweet. You couldn’t help but giggle. Dave was just so cool; you couldn’t deny you had the biggest crush on him. “No Dave we should tell ghost stories. I wouldn’t be a camp out if we didn’t” John said excitedly. “Hmm. That does sound like a good idea” Rose said adding her input. “That’s cool I guess but I’m going first” Dave said. He grabbed the flash light form John and held it under his face. You gulped down your marshmallow hoping Dave’s story wouldn’t be too scary.

  “It all started deep in the woods much like this one. In a log cabin there lived a husband, a wife, and a sweet young baby girl. The husband worked all day chopping wood for villagers while the wife picked berries in the bushes by the cabin.” Dave started off his tale. “One day an old lady came by the wife. The old lady took the wife’s had and looked right into her eyes. ‘Listen to me and listen to me well’ the old lady said. ‘Take your daughter and lock her in the house till she’s eighteen. If you don’t then the grizzly will come after her.’ The wife was unconvinced so the old lady rambled on. ‘The grizzly with one eye and silver claws. He’ll come and eat her up just like he did my own daughters!’ The wife believed her now. She ran back to the house and picked up the small child, bringing her inside and locking the doors. That evening the wife told her husband what the old lady had said and they agreed to never let their daughter out of the house until she was eighteen.”

  “Years went by and the daughter reached the age of fifteen. She had never seen the out side world and wanted nothing more then to go out and play in the grass. But still her parents would not let her out. They had never told her about the grizzly with one eye and silver claws before, only that there were things out in the woods that hurt her. One afternoon she had had enough on her life locked inside the house so when her father left for work and her mother went to pick berries she snuck out the window and into the woods. The daughter spent the whole day exploring the woods finding all kinds of new things. When she left for home late that evening she didn’t realize the presence following her home. Once she reached the log cabin she called home her mother spotted her out the window and moments later the grizzly with one eye and silver claws following right behind her. The mother screamed and the daughter spun around. But it was to late. The grizzly pounced and attacked the girl. He ripped her to shreds spilling blood, flesh, and bones all over the yard. The daughter screamed in agony, pleading for her mother to help her, but she could do nothing but watch. When the grizzly was done he picked up the bones and carried them deep into the woods, putting them in a nice pile of the other young girls he had killed.”


  By the time Dave was done his story the fire was now only smoldering. John yawned and stretched. “That was great Dave, but I think it’s time for bed.” Rose nodded and you quietly got up to go to your tent. “Good night everyone” Rose said heading for her tent. “Good night” you called back. Once inside your tent you shivered trying to get the mental image the story had left out of your head. To be completely honest the tale had scared you senseless.  You changed into your pj’s and slipped under your sleeping bag, snuggling in to its warmth. Slowly you drifted off to sleep. But it wasn’t going to be a peaceful one.

  You stood in the middle of a dark forest clearing. The full moon casting an eerie light on everything.  You weren’t quite sure where you were and it didn’t feel like a dream. For a while you wandered around the forest not noticing the large figure lurking behind you. There was the snap of a twig behind you and you turned around to see the largest grizzly bear ever. It was missing one eye and had silver claws, just like the one from Dave’s story. You ran as fast as you could, the grizzly hot on your trail. The forest seemed to go on forever as you dogged through the trees. Every once and a while you’d look back to see the grizzly right there keeping pace with you. You burst through the trees to find your self face to face with a cliff. By the foot of the cliff lay a pile of clean picked human bones. You ran right to the cliff hoping there would be some way to get up it. The grizzly closed in on you slowly making it’s way towards you. It was to late to do anything. You shielded your self with your arms and screamed as the grizzly’s maw came down on you.

  You awoke with a start inside your tent. Your face was soaked with tears and you were shivering. Without thinking you got up and ran to Dave’s tent, which was directly across from yours. You tore into his tent, startling him awake. “(Name) what’s wrong?” Dave asked as you buried your head in his shoulder. “Y-your story… I-I had… A nightm-mare…” You sobbed out to the best of your ability. Dave wrapped his arms around your shacking frame. “(Name)… If you were sacred you should have said something” he said soothingly. You looked up at him. “But everyone else was enjoying it so much. It wouldn’t have been fair,” you said. Dave wiped the tears from your face. It was such a gentile movement that you never knew the cool kid would make. “The others would have understood” he looked lovingly into your (e/c) eyes. Dave lifted the edge of his sleeping bag and patted to the spot next to him. A soft pink blush spread across your cheeks but you slid in next to him anyways. Dave pulled you in close to him. You could feel his warm chest along your back and his strong arms holding you tightly. You felt incredibly safe next to him. Nothing could harm you here. “Good night (Name)” Dave whispered into your ear. You gave a quiet moan and drifted off to sleep.

  Dave brushed the hair out of (Name)’s sleeping face. She looked like a peaceful angel curled up against Dave’s chest. Dave pulled the sleeping bag a little higher up on the both of them and kissed (Name)’s forehead lightly. “I love you (Name)” he said before he to drifted of to sleep.
Here's another reader insert I've been working on. I suck a writing scary stories so ya... Hope you guys like it~
P.S. If you don't like ghost stories don't read it
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ferriluver101 Featured By Owner Feb 16, 2015  New member
FLUFFFFFYYY
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SilvisMN Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2014
Just some friendly constructive criticism for you:
The ghost story might have been more scary if there had been an end such as and the grizzly still hunts little girls to this day or something to end it off like that, implying that not only was she not the first, but she wasn't the last, either. It doesn't seem like much, but it's the little details that make the difference between a scary story and a nightmare trigger.
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Fantroll-Mowzers Featured By Owner Jan 31, 2015  New member Student Artist
Heh, trigger....
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HomestuckYeah Featured By Owner Jul 23, 2014
part 2?
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harmonylalexander Featured By Owner Jul 17, 2014  Student Filmographer
wow how can you have so much creativity to come up with this wonderful story 
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vinnyroseisbored Featured By Owner Edited Jul 10, 2014
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Pikachu200228 Featured By Owner Jun 30, 2014  Student Artist
SO FLUFFY!!!!!
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Jesse0747 Featured By Owner May 3, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
So kawaiiiiiiiii (≧∇≦)
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Denmark2000 Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2014
Soooo cute isjahskdjxjd
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DoruDesux1 Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
omg Denmark :C
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bulletproofBullet Featured By Owner Jan 26, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
Wow!!!
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JessicaGoldsword Featured By Owner Jan 21, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
I think the image of a bear with one eye and silver claws has been burned into my memory and now I have a phobia of bears...
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imawesomepatty Featured By Owner Dec 24, 2013
*blush*
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dtkluvhd Featured By Owner Nov 27, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
You don't suck at writing stories! I loved this SO much!
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omgggggggggggggggggggggg~ love it xxx <3
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ComicsLKH1 Featured By Owner Jul 6, 2013  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
UGGU DESSU SUGOI
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Momentoiya Featured By Owner Oct 16, 2013  Student Writer
DESU S-SENPAI NOTICED MEE
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Soulkun4eva Featured By Owner Jun 19, 2013  Student Photographer
to be honest I might get a little freaked out, by the fact that I'm turning fifteen this year and the girl who died in Dave's story was fifteen
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HoogieBluBlu Featured By Owner May 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Wow! Awesome! You have a couple of spelling errors though! But I love it it's absolutely amazing!
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EmmenAria Featured By Owner May 7, 2013
And now I have completed my transformation into an angle.... :iconlogicplz:
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GirlBrony888 Featured By Owner Apr 27, 2013
Aww so cute!
Btw your spelling mistake at the end was funny. I looked like an angle lol. This was awesome!
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kikuhondaismineeee Featured By Owner Apr 26, 2013
sooooo cute !!!!
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kiki554778 Featured By Owner Apr 23, 2013
This was so cute! I loved it!
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Joltenation Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student General Artist
just so you know, Dave says 'sacred' and he 'whipped' my tears away gently.
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Yurichan678 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry my computer broke and I'm in Italy on exchange with no way to fix it so I don't have auto correct. That and I am the worst speller in the world...
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Joltenation Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student General Artist
X3 its okay! Just thought I'd let you know. Its a good story by the way! ^^ I really liked it.
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Yurichan678 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you~
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Joltenation Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Student General Artist
:33 of course!
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MewCupcake1 Featured By Owner Apr 14, 2013  Student Artist
Ive always wanted to be an angle
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Joltenation Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2013  Student General Artist
Obtuse or acute? CX I noticed that too.
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MewCupcake1 Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student Artist
A-cute ;)
yup, my friend did that once too.
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Joltenation Featured By Owner Apr 18, 2013  Student General Artist
CX
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MewCupcake1 Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Student Artist
:A

Sup.
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Joltenation Featured By Owner Apr 19, 2013  Student General Artist
:U

Sup
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MewCupcake1 Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Student Artist
:A

I warned 'bout the staires bro. I told you dawg.
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Joltenation Featured By Owner Apr 20, 2013  Student General Artist
IT JUST KEEPS HAPPENING
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madibear6 Featured By Owner Apr 7, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
HOLY SHIT ITS BRAVE
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Pyrona-Captor Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
That story was lame.

Just saying.
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Pyrona-Captor Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
The ghost story, I mean.
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Pyrona-Captor Featured By Owner Mar 30, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Not the..... Actual.... Big picture story..... Just the story within the story...
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NoahizmineTDWT Featured By Owner Mar 14, 2013  Student Artist
I have a scary story.
Once there was a boy named Dave Strider.
He died.
I cry every time TTwTT
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TheIncostant Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2013
I... Just... Died.... Infinity times over. That was, without a doubt, the scariest story ever.
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NoahizmineTDWT Featured By Owner Mar 19, 2013  Student Artist
I know.. it brings tears to my eyes every time I even glance at it..
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WinterMint1 Featured By Owner Mar 21, 2013
I have a scarier one!
There once was a story called homestuck.
And the characters didn't actually exist.
:(
//crying
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ghostgirl109 Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2013  Hobbyist Digital Artist
ok this is random but nice OC i like it
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KewlKatCutie Featured By Owner Mar 24, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
but there something worse about that one.. i-its.. TRUE D'x
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NoahizmineTDWT Featured By Owner Mar 22, 2013  Student Artist
Oh my gog! I-I... think my heart skipped a beat on that one.. O^O
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tentailedfox Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2013
rawr reading this AND watching Silent hill revelation......NOT A GOOD COMBO
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QueenEmidalla Featured By Owner Feb 22, 2013  Professional Traditional Artist
uugh I don't find gost stories like those scary especially with those beggings but loved the the whole story
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OoOoOoOmnaOoOoOoO Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2013
i would have night mares too:P
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